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A certain man, in sterile robes,
His prisoners to seek,
Comes strolling down the dingy halls,
That, nauseating, reek.

Their eyes reveal such grievous hurt.
Infection crusts each tear.
Corrosive burns are all they know,
Save tormentors they fear.

Now, here is a sedated one—
Electrodes watch his brain.
No drugs will he receive for his
Excruciating pain.

Experimental surgeries
For those who need them not,
But who cares should they live or die?
They're all just left to rot.

These needles inject certain death—
The cancers men abhor—
So maybe victims can be forced
To outlive those before.

What were the crimes that brought them here
To clasp these metal bars
With hands that bleed in ill-repair
And stiffen with their scars?

These countless, captive creatures lie
So brutalized and weak.
They cannot really save themselves,
Since they can't even speak.

So history has taught us: do
Because you simply can.
But why would you test man's best friends
To see what works for man?
This is a ballad, written for my current English class, about animal testing. Out of all the topics I heard, I think mine was the most original. ;)

I entered it into the "World Changes" contest at :iconscribes-are-beckoned:, and I won 1st! Yay!

I also did a poetry reading of this, which is available at this [link] .
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lost-in-wonderlandd Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope one day I can write poetry like this.....stunning work <3
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you! You're so kind! I'm flattered. :iconblushplz:
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foto-ragazza14 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
I nearly cried while reading this; that is the power of your stunning words! Wonderful, wonderful job! :clap:
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Student General Artist
WOW. I didn't think I would get that much of a reaction! Thank you!
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foto-ragazza14 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
Don't thank me; you more than deserve it!
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student General Artist
AW! :blush:
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Luna-is-only-so-many Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, this is a really well written poem, I just hate it so much because it makes me so upset! I have an aversion to anything that gets my emotional goat going, especially since I am the sort of person that will run headlong into a fray and put her foot in her mouth. XD Itry to keep myself tempered down for people's sake. Sorry for not favouritng, I do love the poem, I just can't do it and keep my conscious clear.
**boring but maybe inspirational anecdote**
When I was younger I found out about the Humane Society. I was living overseas at the time and was living in a bit of a bubble, so when I found out all the cruel things done to animals I went mad with angry grief because I am a huge animal lover and wanted to be a vet at the time or own a cat sanctuary for all those poor mistreated cats. (I'm a bit obsessed with cats, and was even more so in elementary. I read all the cat books in the school library to the point I almost had a nervous breakdown when I realized one was gone...for good) So needless to say this hit me pretty deep. I am a huge animal softy.
**END**
So over all, well done! I think this is proof you definitely did a great job with your poem. It spoke to me and the only bad thing I have to say is that it spook a little too much, which either way is still good.
Congrats on the contest, you deserved! (Though I guess that's obvious enough.)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Ha Ha! Thank you! I'm obsessed with cats too. ^_^ That's perfectly understandable though. I wouldn't want you to do something against your conscience. Thank you for taking the time to read and leave such an interactive comment! I really appreciate that! :iconhyperplz:
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Falareste Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student Writer
Your poem is extremely riveting and vivid. However, as someone who actually works with animal research, at one of the world's largest cancer treatment centers, I feel obliged to point out a few inaccuracies:

-The animal area is kept extremely clean. The halls are a light blue and well-lit, as are the rooms. It smells, but not nauseatingly so, and cages are also kept clean and free of parasites.

-The cages themselves are made of a sort of Plexiglass. They're spacious, being about ten inches across and a foot and a half long. At most, they contain four mice or two rats at a time- if a cage is overcrowded, the keeper is fined. Bedding is provided- soft, cloth-like material as well as pebbles- and food is kept on a rack above the ground, low enough for the animals to reach, but high enough to prevent it from becoming soiled. The cages are connected to a machine that circulates fresh air through them around the clock and provides fresh water whenever the animals need it.

-The animals are cared for. There is a veterinary clinic that sees to the animals and a monitor staff that checks on all the animals every day for injury or abuse. If they find any animals fighting, they separate them and give them medicine for their wounds. Aside from being used for cancer research, the animals are healthy, not bleeding, infected, bony, or scabbed over.

-Finally, we do NOT brutalize our animals. We do not relish the pain they go through- yes, we are aware that we cause them pain- and we try to make it easy on them. Most researchers you'll meet are extremely nice people, not sociopaths. My coworker speaks softly to her mice when she handles them, apologizes often and pets them after she sedates them. Even if there were animal abusers, they wouldn't last long- anyone who abuses an animal faces job loss on top of heavy fines.

Is animal research cruel? Yes- I'll not deny that. But the alternative, letting people die or suffer through current treatments, and letting their friends and families watch the entire time, is far crueler.

Apologies if I was harsh- I just wanted to clarify things. ^^;
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student General Artist
Hi! Thanks for reading my poem and taking the time to clarify! Thank you for telling me about the animal research facility that you work at! It was most intriguing! However, I think it is not my turn to clarify.

Former National Cancer Institute Director Dr. Richard Klausner has stated, "The history of cancer research has been the history of curing cancer in the mouse. We have cured mice of cancer for decades, and it simply didn't work in humans."

You said that the alternative is letting people die and suffer. However, there are many cruelty-free researching methods that are widely accepted alternatives.

Because I wanted to use this for the "World Changes" contest, I wrote it more about the dawn of animal research, like WW1 era. Sorry, I know I didn't say that in the artist's comments. However, you have to admit that different people react differently to sensory stimuli, so, for example, just because the smell is not very bad to you, it does not mean that someone else might, in fact, find it nauseating. Many of the words and descriptions that I chose were because they fit better in the rhythm or rhyme. Additionally, when I wrote this, I was attempting to imitate traditional Scottish ballad writing, which encouraged writers to take artistic liberty.

I am sorry if my poem has offended you, but it was inspired by watching hours of video footage collections from many research facilities. They were not all cancer facilities like yours. These videos showed places very similar to the descriptions in my poem, and inane brutalization of animals. Maybe these are rare, and the people who do such things are fired and fined, but they clearly do happen. Even if I am speaking about a minority, they do exist. Any mistreated animals deserve a voice, and my poem gave them one.

Again, I am very sorry that my poem offended you. Ballads are, however, intended to emotionally stir the reader, and raise a sense of indignation. I am glad that your employers take better care to make sure that animals are treated better than others.

Thank you for your time! :D
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